So interesting story but I’m going to drop. First, the English and grammar are decent. There are issues here and there but they aren’t too distracting. Story development: this is where the quality drops. It’s an interesting concept but the logic behind actions do not line up 5 times out of 10. This means that of the 10 actions the mc makes, 5 of said actions are complete forced plot or made up reasoning. I’ll continue this with the character design cause they mix. Character design: ok until the characters show skills they have no right to be able to show. The mc is a supposed city kid with no survival skills. Then he is somehow able to tell different breeds of wolves apart from each other. Then he is able to skin and butcher animals. He literally goes from no survival skills to all the survival skills. This is further exacerbated due to him having no tools/knives to help with his actions. The author obviously doesn’t understand that skinning an animal can’t just be done with your hands. I need at least a sharp knife. World background: ok but ties into the other evaluation. The mc makes constant assumptions that have no actual logical backing to describe his situation. Then the author doesn’t describe some things until they are relevant to the story at hand. This leads to even more unreasonable assumptions and actions that have no tells to why the mc actually did it or what is actually happening.
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Thanks for this review. I know some stuff in the start doesn't add up but I have no means to update them as the story has progressed a lot. But I am confident to say that the content from the second phase is written clearly and if you give it a chance. I think you might like it.Anyways, thanks again for the productive review (It gives me insight as to where I need to improve) and hope you have a good day!
