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young_master69
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2023-06-16 01:32

Author, please don't ruin your novel with such frustrating and unnecessary, stupid misunderstandings.(talking about your latest chapters,197 or 198 smthing) And when the mc came to disclose information about his fertility, his interactions with the village head and thak, has made me realise, that the village officials have a pea for a brain when it comes to handling truly important matters, so please make your characters a little more intelligent, it would only increase the already good quality of your novel.overall, you are already doing a great job author, but if you fix these little flaws, then i assure you, you will truly transcend the webnovel realm, and imminently, ascend to a new higher plane.

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