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GodOfLight
GodOfLightLv11yr
2023-05-12 03:31

Author nees to put in a lot, A LOT of work & effort to make the story not sound like a 3 year old trying to recall his dream. I honestly would have thought the author was in middle schoor or just entered high school if it wasn't for the patreon. .. . It's a good idea, the premise is good. But the execution.... needs work. Both to make the story flow better, and to not write a stupid m.c. 1. The dude takes the tim to shape his threads into a kife to try and cut ppl (why are so....) 2. Dude kills an abusive teacher but refuses to kill hydra agents WHO ARE TRYING TO CAPTURE, EXPERIMENT & KILL HIM, AND HAVE DONE THE SAME TO HIS FRIENDS AND COUNTLESS KIDS. 3. Dude falls into a river in America & wakes up in Africa or some wildlife preserve rum by some tiger king... ( i don't know how lion cubs & hyenas are running around in America & in FOREST of all things) 4. Dude decides to hide & asks his "friend" her powers.. But makes a public display of their powers in front of a class full of kids... (people with the loosest and loudest mouths). He knows he is in marvel, he knows about mutant hate, shield & he is literally trying to escape from hydra. 5. He lacks clothes, he nees clothes, he can make knives with his threads, his power is literally ito ito no mi... so how does he solve the issue of his nudity... he hunters snakes & masks clothes from their leather.. & that's where I stopped.

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Im on the latest chapter atm which is 90, the start i dont really remember that well, but i do remember the little show of power in the school, i kinda just assumed that the beginning wasn't that important since they were just kids, its kind of iffy at the start but overall its better than most stories i read on Webnovel so i give it a solid 9/10, and i dont know what you mean by "to make the story not sound like a 3 year old trying to recall his dream" it has the detail and even some minor things are detailed at times throughout the story, the grammar is somewhat off at times but it gets its point across despite the minor errors, overall i think you should read to like chapter 20-30 then decide if you still feel the same way, because the story shows noticeable improvement at least to me around those chapters

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