ThefantastictouchLv42yr

2023-02-15 18:36

I usually don´t write reviews but for that one I really have to. This book has a good concept and the author´s writing is good. These are its only pros . Now for the cons. There are MANY. At times the MC seems dumb , at others the author tries to make him appear smart( Yes he appears smart but isn´t), and the while thing about him acting superior or badly to gain SP doesn´t make him great either . Plus , a big turn off for me is how he doesn't take time to REALLY plan his actions ( he didn´t take time to question why his watch had that weird app and what was the purpose of that app . Even the previous owner´s life was shoved aside, arguing that it wasn´t all that important at that time)morn about his past life ( I honestly think that he should be shown sad and bamboozled - for some time at least- because he just arrived in another world and even if his parents weren´t that important in his life, seing how he cares about his book that he didn´t put an end to, he needs to be sad or frustrated.) Whatever strong emotion you want but not accept everything, know where he is and what he should do just when he arrived . Other than that , his major problem ( and other characters´ aswell) is their lack of consistancy. They are forgetable and do not have any traits that will make you think" These guys are great! I wish I could tag along with them!". What about the story then ? The story drags too much for unnecessary events . I still remember the ridiculous situation that lead him to become a fake couple with Charlotte, and how long ( 1or 2 chapters) it took to clear all that mess. I also don´t see the point in making the readers think they will eventually become a real couple , when it won´t be in the end ( the chapter ´fantasy´ which the author recommanded to read to know about the real female lead reveals it ) and I feel sad for Charlotte too( she seems to be getting her hopes up ). We all know that Evelyn is going to be the real fl. And that´s annoying ( can´t you authors of books like ´ the novel´s extra´ write about a non icy yet likable and useful fl ?). You see , i´m not even taking about the plot but the characters because I see no real plot execution. Now let´s talk about world building. The book is still in its early stage so there aren´t much world building . But the little bit of world building the author did is nothing out of the ordinary and the info dump is rather annoying. To sum up , I recommand you " the extra´s odyssey" , because this book here needs to be rewrote .

Shadow Author

Zach_Lecher

4.2

114 Chs