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2023-03-24 19:11

You have a very nice core for the story , author . Just hold on to it . It has a very nice development . Maybe the only thing holding the story back is over complication of character and repeated use of names . At the same time , So many new names have been introduced that the main character and important supporting characters are being overshadowed . Else , its all good and will be watching over the progression of story.

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Please give mine a try Name: Reincarnation of the Cross

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Potatoplanet
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Very nice start, Very nice characters. I actually can’t wait for more.

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