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2023-04-27 02:16

This story has me totally invested, I really like the portrayal of mental illnesses, the background is really great, and even if the MC doesn’t really talk, you can still understand him and I think that is really great. The only mistakes I have noticed is just a few words one word before/after where they should be, and one where the wrong form of word was used, overall this story is really great and has good potential!

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Thank you for the kind review and feedback. I will try to be on the lookout for errors. ~

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