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SolomonCliff
SolomonCliffLv12yr
2023-01-10 23:43

[Review after reading 11 chapters] This actually isn't too bad in its own genre. The premise itself is a bit generic, but the way it's got to it is something I thought was unique. The grammar is weird sometimes, sentence structure could be better and the strangest thing I noticed was that the storytelling voice, the narration, sometimes dips into the extreme casual. And it sometimes treats the reader as if he were stupid and also, the story is full of exposition, just telling us 'This is how it is' instead of trying to use another method of convey this information. Story-wise I have only a few complaints, which have may have been resolved in the next twenty other chapters I haven't read. !SPOILERS! This is, to me, the weirdest thing. This is the third and last attempt that Rishi, the MC, has to pass the exam to get a Book of Contracts. He's hurt and instead of trying to get healthy before attempting the exam, he just rushes in. Why? Rishi himself was surprised when he found out that he was healed when he was teleported into the exam arena. So, I assumed that he didn't know, or wasn't sure that he would be. Why is he rushing so hard to get it done, even while hurt? And secondly, there doesn't seem to be a downside to the two types of contracts one can have with a beast when choosing the servant variety. You could be normal friends with your beast, just as with the partner one, but still have the servant one chosen, so that it cannot leave or disobey you.

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One_Shot_MAN
One_Shot_MANAuthor

The answer is simple Rishi had heard that when you enter trial all your wounds would be healed but he had never entered the trial in injured state. He was relieved because hearing something is one thing and seeing it is another. He Entered Trial beacause it's the only option which could heal him as well as make him strong enough to survive in the jungle.

SolomonCliff
SolomonCliffLv1

maybe you should make that clear to the reader? Or let Rishi have a moment of thought where he thinks that.

One_Shot_MAN:The answer is simple Rishi had heard that when you enter trial all your wounds would be healed but he had never entered the trial in injured state. He was relieved because hearing something is one thing and seeing it is another. He Entered Trial beacause it's the only option which could heal him as well as make him strong enough to survive in the jungle.
nvanattia
nvanattiaLv14

Glad that something is so obvious to the author, but not explained to the readers. Makes perfect sense.

One_Shot_MAN:The answer is simple Rishi had heard that when you enter trial all your wounds would be healed but he had never entered the trial in injured state. He was relieved because hearing something is one thing and seeing it is another. He Entered Trial beacause it's the only option which could heal him as well as make him strong enough to survive in the jungle.
Daoist_sweetdemise
Daoist_sweetdemiseLv3

I have a question.I've read 3 chapters maybe 4.What makes the MC special.?Let me clarify. Some mcs have system. Some have memories, some cheat op item. Some mcs get some unique bloodline or power.Naruto had nine tails and sage bloodline.Luffy has d, plus op devil fruit.Ichigo has like 4 power systemsGon has ridiculous talent.Eren is a titan.So this MC is a failure. So what changed. Did he rebirth? Or get memories. Or was he always talented but first 2 awakening failed because of external factor.Or is he just a average MC who through hard work and sheer effort passes awakening on his final attempt and kinda power of friendship and effort his way to success? Cause there's nothing more unreachable and unrealistic than this. And I dint want to spend hours reading average Joe MC

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In the year 2050, a massive spaceship appears above Earth, causing panic among the governments of the world. A humanoid alien emerges from the ship and introduces himself as the ancestor of humanity, claiming that his species distributed their life code to various universes and galaxies in an effort to recover their numbers after a war. The alien goes on to reveal that nuclear energy will be removed from Earth and replaced with a new form of energy called mana, which has multiple uses. He also announces the installation of a dimensional dungeon system to challenge humanity and help them become stronger. While the concept of an ancestor alien visiting Earth and introducing a new form of energy is certainly interesting, the execution of this idea could be improved upon. For example, it is not entirely clear how the alien's announcement of the removal of nuclear energy is received by the various governments of the world. Additionally, the explanation for the existence of humanity and their connection to the ancestor alien species could be fleshed out more. While it is mentioned that the lack of mana on Earth has made humanity weak, it would be helpful to have a more detailed explanation of how this has occurred and how the introduction of mana will change things. Additionally, the concept of a dimensional dungeon system to challenge humanity is intriguing, but it is not entirely clear how this system will work or what its purpose is. More information on the specific trials and challenges that humanity will face, as well as the rewards that can be earned by completing them, would be helpful in fully understanding this aspect of the story. The character of the ancestor alien is also somewhat lacking in depth. While his physical appearance and the fact that he can communicate telepathically with humanity are certainly interesting, there is not much else known about him. A more detailed background and personality for this character would add depth to the story and make him a more fully realized character. Overall, while the world building in this story has potential, it could be improved upon with more detailed explanations and fleshed out characters. However, the concept of an ancestor alien introducing a new form of energy and a dimensional dungeon system to challenge humanity is certainly an interesting one and has the potential to be developed into a compelling story.

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