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hidingpanduhLv122yr
2023-03-14 17:17

I love the idea of a girl trying to see the love of her life again, and that she is willing to do anything and everything for him. I also wonder if he felt the same truly, otherwise would it be worth it to cross to another place and do all she’s doing? I really adore the way you use comparisons in your writing, it helps for the reader to be able to picture the emotions of the main character, of Callisto. “If you are the devil, I will throw away my humanity” lines like that show her passion. I also like the way the author writes some of the fighting scenes, which show Callisto’s weaknesses and strengths. I agree with some of the other reviews that the paragraphing could be split up a bit more. As for the pacing I think the incentive to continue can be a bit lessened when some things feel more like a filler than the main juicy content. It get a bit confusing in terms of direction when Callisto is still trying to adjust to this new life where she has to destroy Lux. My suggestion would be to keep Callisto’s motivation strong from the beginning, as for me it seems to wane a bit in the recent chapters. I also like how there’s still an air of mystery about the people who have Callisto the mission or chance to see her loved one again through this new world and new chance. I wonder how that will be incorporated in the future chapters. Overall, I’m enjoying this book and I’m looking forward to reading more. Would definitely recommend to lovers of reincarnated/revenge and second chance otome love stories. Keep it up, dear author!

This Life, Dedicated to You

AbyssalVox
4.7
30 Chs

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Hi, thank you so much for your in-depth review, I greatly appreciate it! I will be taking all your suggestions to heart and editing previous chapters to shorten paragraphs as well as making sure that Callisto’s priorities are still shown! Your detailed suggestions mean a lot to me since I don’t really have a feel of what readers think when I’m writing. Again, thank you for taking your time to write a review!

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MrFay
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The author's writing in this novel is exceptional. The language used is both rich and engaging, allowing the reader to become fully immersed in the world and its characters. The author's ability to create vivid and detailed descriptions of the world and its inhabitants is truly impressive, and it adds a layer of depth to the story that makes it all the more enjoyable to read. One of the standout features of the novel is the author's skill in developing the characters. Each one is unique and fully fleshed out, with distinct personalities and voices that make them feel real and relatable. The way the author portrays their interactions and relationships is also impressive, as it adds an additional layer of complexity to the story. Another impressive aspect of the novel is the pacing of the plot. The story moves at a steady pace, keeping the reader engaged and intrigued throughout. The plot is well-thought-out and executed, and it is clear that the author has put a great deal of time and effort into crafting a cohesive and satisfying story. Overall, the writing in this novel is excellent, and it is clear that the author has a talent for storytelling. With its immersive world, well-developed characters, and engaging plot, this is a novel that is sure to captivate readers from start to finish.

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I_Am_Death
I_Am_DeathLv15

I'm not really good at reviews so I'll just say that it's really interesting

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Shiro_Savage
Shiro_SavageLv2

Great work from the author, best book I’ve read in quite a while. A few rare grammatical errors but, that is fine with me. Looking forward to how this book progresses thoughout its creation. Great character design and worldbuilding, makes the book very entertaining. 10/10 from me.

2yr
prajnya_shriyan
prajnya_shriyanLv12

I'm not much into romance but from whatever I've read so far this one has a great potential and also looks quite fresh. Looking forward for more chapters.

2yr
ricebucket0_0
ricebucket0_0Lv14

Truly an exciting read! The premise is interesting and shows a lot of potential, I especially love how the author phrases each scene so beautifully that I could easily picture what's happening. It's like I'm watching a movie! The pace is fast but not confusing, overall a great read! A little bit of suggestion though, I think it'll be better if the author could spill a bit about what the story is about in the synopsis as it'll help in piquing a reader's interest. I'll be waiting for the next update so work hard, author!

2yr
RomanceFanatic028
RomanceFanatic028Lv4

At the start I was confused about the fml’s name. I thought it was Azel but turned out it was Callisto. Unique name btw. I really hope this don’t take route of the abandoned empress. I don’t want fml to end with the box guy. Overall, interesting read. Just try to shorten your paragraphs a little. Anyway, good luck. Would love to keep reading. [img=fp][img=coins][img=recommend]

2yr
acebellrain
acebellrainLv2

Honestly I was pretty shocked when I started reading. The writing felt so immersive from the get-go, and got better with each passing chapter. I feel like I can truly feel what the main character is feeling. I may be a bit biased since the writing style is similar to my own, but this is truly some fantastic work. Best of luck author ! Definitely gonna keep up with the chapters as they come.

2yr
MrBtheNovelist
MrBtheNovelistLv3

Love the premise, has great potential! Romance as a writing genre is tougher than it looks and the foundations were set well from the get go... Keep it up!

2yr
Lazy_Authoress
Lazy_AuthoressLv3

An impressive start and plot as well as smooth and fluid writing. The author has a way with words which makes the state of mind of the characters to be felt very clearly. As a fan of transmigration/reincarnation stories, I am definitely adding this to my library!

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