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2023-03-12 01:20

At the start I was confused about the fml’s name. I thought it was Azel but turned out it was Callisto. Unique name btw. I really hope this don’t take route of the abandoned empress. I don’t want fml to end with the box guy. Overall, interesting read. Just try to shorten your paragraphs a little. Anyway, good luck. Would love to keep reading. [img=fp][img=coins][img=recommend]

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Thank you for reviewing! And it definitely won’t be like the abandoned empress, I dislike the ml in that one too.

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hidingpanduh
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I love the idea of a girl trying to see the love of her life again, and that she is willing to do anything and everything for him. I also wonder if he felt the same truly, otherwise would it be worth it to cross to another place and do all she’s doing? I really adore the way you use comparisons in your writing, it helps for the reader to be able to picture the emotions of the main character, of Callisto. “If you are the devil, I will throw away my humanity” lines like that show her passion. I also like the way the author writes some of the fighting scenes, which show Callisto’s weaknesses and strengths. I agree with some of the other reviews that the paragraphing could be split up a bit more. As for the pacing I think the incentive to continue can be a bit lessened when some things feel more like a filler than the main juicy content. It get a bit confusing in terms of direction when Callisto is still trying to adjust to this new life where she has to destroy Lux. My suggestion would be to keep Callisto’s motivation strong from the beginning, as for me it seems to wane a bit in the recent chapters. I also like how there’s still an air of mystery about the people who have Callisto the mission or chance to see her loved one again through this new world and new chance. I wonder how that will be incorporated in the future chapters. Overall, I’m enjoying this book and I’m looking forward to reading more. Would definitely recommend to lovers of reincarnated/revenge and second chance otome love stories. Keep it up, dear author!

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