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Zeroz7
Zeroz7Lv31yr
2023-02-06 22:34

No me gusta juzgar tan pronto, pero solo desde el primer capitulo la lectura ya es incomoda. Parece como si me estuviese contando un resumen rápido de los hechos que se supone e están ocurrieron do en tiempo de narración, lo cual quita toda la inmersión y sabor a la historia

In the movie worlds with my system

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