Only have read several chapters yet. Please correct me if I am wrong. Suggestion, use "speech" for speaking. 'thoughts' for inner voice. Apologies, but sometimes the dialogues are clunky and feels empty. This is only my opinion and preference you do not need to conform with it, but I think this type of stories is better written in third person specially if it is about politics and kingdom building, I think this method offers more freedom on description and worldbuilding. First person really lacks details and a general overview of a situation thus why the flow is a bit chaotic because we can only see what the character see. Though still this a good story among the many here in webnovel.
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