Review Detail of Scarface3699 in Solo Leveling: The Thunder Monarch

u overcompensated in this rewrite based off that review. 4 lengthy chapters in and he should have awakened at the end of the whole ggoblin incident coz u can show ur main character isn't weak willed after like the first or 2nd goblin goes down everything after that is unnecessary and adds nothing to the story. u also have a tendency to overwrite things for example :'mc takes a object out of his right pocket, it's his phone he looks to see what the alert on it is and it's a text message ' etc I paraphrased slight but there is a bunch of trimming to be done there that action took almost a paragraph to explain what could be done in a sentence or two for example :'mc takes his phone out of his breast pocket and sees it's a text ' anyway still early on in the rewrite all i can do is hope u see this and continue to improve.