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Violet_Peaches
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2023-10-26 10:40

The story is quite reveling. but the conversations and thoughts are written in a way that is very confusing (as to who made it). confusing point of view in terms of conversations. the thoughts are all over the place making it hard to pick up.

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So, i managed to read around 170 chaps and i thought i'd leave a review. The story is good, with well developed world, purpose and depth, with new things being discovered each chapter. The update stability is also good, while the writing quality is decent, with occasional typos or grammar errros, but not too much to be an issue. The MC and Harem have a well developed path of growth, which is clear to follow and well paved. The problem is, the MC himself. He is careless, dense and clueless, who seems incapable of thinking for himself and prioritising. He has a cleear path of growth and a system, but he only uses the system when others remind him or when he remembers it, never truly focused on his goal. The heroines are not that well developed, as once MC has his scene with them, most are forgotten and only receieve casual mentions, with only a couple of them being more present. Some girls get 2-3 scenes, others get 1 during first meeting and then even tho all live in MC's house, are abbandoned and separated from the story. Other main wives also barely receieve any development, and seem to dissapear until casually mentioned by others, with new girls constantly popping up around the MC who never seems to have time for them. The novel is a good read, but the MC and the relationship developments are severely lacking, making it seem more of a Pokemon hunt than anything, with MC only having feelings for 1 or 2 out of 8 or 9... There is always a sense of distance between the MC and his girls, and sometimes i struggle to remember who is who even tho i binged 170 chaps in a few days.

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