Only read the first chapter so I'll only be criticising based on what I saw. First due to your lacking vocabulary and grammar not only are you incapable of conveying your ideas and thoughts across, it also greatly limits how smoothly the story flows. Second, I find your choice to simply hand the Mc his reincarnation and powers extremely bland and unimaginative not to mention unearned. No matter how cool the powers are, if they are simply handed to you then they feel empty. Though I'll give you a pass on this one since it's your first time and since R.O.B handing out powers for BS reasons like good Karma or the Mc's death being the fault of R.O.B is sadly a common trop. Don't worry about it I did it on my first story as well. Third, Your dialogue skills abhorrent, the conversations don't feel natural or realistic enough. I hope you can accept the critique of a fellow author whom speaks English as a third language as well and I hope that you will use it in the future to improve, It'll take years of practice but you can definitely reach the level of a professional in the future, I've seen it happen before with other authors and with myself as well. Talent and creativity isn't everything in writing, just like any art form, repeated practice is 90% of what makes the art great. No matter how brilliant you are, if you can articulate your ideas then they are just that, ideas.
Liked it!
LIKE*can't articulate your ideas*
i do accept criticism, but, sigh, I also do hope you read the story first, or at least until chapter 10 because there's explanation about why X give him power without any reason such as good karma or something.. And idk if I really can accept this review from you who just read the one chapter and that was first chapter.. Because it's looks like you not give it because the story is bad or something but just because the bad grammar and the dialogue.. I mean, ok if you buy a book and the grammar is bad like mine and the dialogue is unrealistic so you give 1 star, but this is free, and we all know there's a lot of beginner author, so......yeah...... Anyway thank-you for the advice..
first impressions are extremely important. so my review is valid in my opinion. And the book being free does not excuse the bad quality, Many of the greatest books and stories are completely free.
KissShot6:i do accept criticism, but, sigh, I also do hope you read the story first, or at least until chapter 10 because there's explanation about why X give him power without any reason such as good karma or something.. And idk if I really can accept this review from you who just read the one chapter and that was first chapter.. Because it's looks like you not give it because the story is bad or something but just because the bad grammar and the dialogue.. I mean, ok if you buy a book and the grammar is bad like mine and the dialogue is unrealistic so you give 1 star, but this is free, and we all know there's a lot of beginner author, so......yeah...... Anyway thank-you for the advice..
But those good books cost like dozen og hours from the author… and we all know what happens to most of those books- hiatus, dropped- ghosting… honestly i prefer people with bad grammar and a lot of love for writting. After all mistakes can be corrected but giving up cannot. That being said 1 star review would just be bad to honestly give. For one it would destroy someones motivation and two it just won’t strike out as well. We all have our ideas and for some introverts getting nailed down means they might just as well be silent. So all i’m saying is i have no clue what i’m saying. I’m incredibly bored and i just wrote this for fun.
Lustful_Death:first impressions are extremely important. so my review is valid in my opinion. And the book being free does not excuse the bad quality, Many of the greatest books and stories are completely free.
When I had bad grammar it took me 6 hours to write a 2k word chapter, now that I have somewhat decent Grammar it still takes me 5-6 hours to write a 2k word chapter. Articulation takes practice over a long time not small effort over a short time. And the author asked for genuine constructive criticism, i delivered, what he does with it wether it is to scratch it up to hate or tough but fair advice is up to him.
lazyvampiredemonas:But those good books cost like dozen og hours from the author… and we all know what happens to most of those books- hiatus, dropped- ghosting… honestly i prefer people with bad grammar and a lot of love for writting. After all mistakes can be corrected but giving up cannot. That being said 1 star review would just be bad to honestly give. For one it would destroy someones motivation and two it just won’t strike out as well. We all have our ideas and for some introverts getting nailed down means they might just as well be silent. So all i’m saying is i have no clue what i’m saying. I’m incredibly bored and i just wrote this for fun.
