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zakaria_f
zakaria_fLv151yr
2023-11-16 10:29

Everything about this story is good even excellent imo besides two things: Grammar mistakes, like misusing he/she/her/his/prince/princes/princes/princesses/should/could/would. Pacing is slow at certain parts of the story but in general it's fine. Besides that the plot, the character design, the characters' interactions, the drama and the ability to make the reader emotional towards the MC are top-notch. This novel has amazing potential, a hidden gem only if you can ignore those two cons I urge you to read the story otherwise you are going to be frustrated. To the author please fix those mistakes because this story is a gem but unfortunately, most readers won't bear with the grammar mistakes and will drop the novel before realizing the plot is extremely good. Good luck and I hope you the best!

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Hile_Lawrence
Hile_LawrenceAuthor

Thank you very much for your review, I am currently revise some grammatical mistake from the first chapter.

zakaria_f
zakaria_fLv15

Amazing, good luck with it đź‘Ť

Hile_Lawrence:Thank you very much for your review, I am currently revise some grammatical mistake from the first chapter.
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