Mc has no motive to do anything, making it hard to invest in the story or conflict. Mc would rather be sleeping. systems with personalities are double-edged swords. If done right, it can enhance if wrong it can hurt,but the system can't be the only driving force of the Mc growth.
RighteousFilth
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LIKESkarlet_Retro:you say that like it's a small number 5 to 10 chapters max to hook someone
RighteousFilth:I guess you didn't read it to chapter 70 before your review