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Elysium_69
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2023-09-26 07:16

It feels like the author can't decide how to progress properly and keeps repeating the same plot with minor changes over and over, it's getting tedious. There's also the fact that nearly every chapter is plagued with the status window which is something I've ignored for quite a while now as I don't want to accuse the author of anything regarding this but I can't help but find it very tedious to read as some info there barely matters, at least in most cases. Overall, I appreciate the author for the attention to details as a fan of hard fantasy, unfortunately however, I cannot find any other pros. There are a lot of cons, however, like I said the status windows is too repetitive and tedious. The dialogues are too long, there are various other methods that can make it more engaging, especially on info dumps, however I didn't see any improvement. Another is the authors's poor ways of valuing characters, the arcs where time is either skipped or regressed made many characters pointless and irrelevant to the story, or maybe they were just forgotten?

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Kumaresh_007
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i think it is good and best novel . please support .

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