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Master_Celestial
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2023-03-04 06:06

Dropped at chapters 31. I like the story, but I absolutely dislike the Mc. He is a nice guy that let‘s strangers walk over him like a proper Japanese mc but stops his own girl from even defending him and orders her around like a c7ck.

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Ethel_Imaginations
Ethel_ImaginationsAuthor

read at least a few chaps ahead... why do people judge so quickly... I changed the directions of the story too...

Master_Celestial
Master_CelestialLv4

Most people dislike waiting for character development for a variety of reasons. I for one am not patient enough. Furthermore, I think 31 chapters are enough, no? Also… normally, I would continue reading as it wasn‘t so bad, but chapter 31 (the encounter with the survivors from the lower floor) disappointed me greatly.

Ethel_Imaginations:read at least a few chaps ahead... why do people judge so quickly... I changed the directions of the story too...
Master_Celestial
Master_CelestialLv4

Im sorry if my review sounds offensive, I was pretty annoyed at the time I wrote that.

Ethel_Imaginations:read at least a few chaps ahead... why do people judge so quickly... I changed the directions of the story too...
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Ethel_Imaginations
Ethel_ImaginationsAuthor

So I have written over 150 chaps and here is an honest review from what I have collected so far. Pros: 1. You won’t be disappointed. There are twists where you would least expect them and the story is really interesting with changing things every once in a while. From the start, things pick up an interesting route. 2. The system elements, other scenes and fights are not bad. They may not be perfect but they surely won’t disappoint you at all. You would be able to enjoy it and things get even better in the later chapters. 3. Writing quality is smooth. You can judge it for yourself. So this one is on you, though personally I feel like it’s quite smooth. 4. The plot and the world building is not exactly what you can call perfect but overall I worked enough to deliver enough ideas to make sure that you don’t lack any imaginative content. 5. The MC’s character is kind of childish + mature + kinda dark at times, but that is because of things that go on and happen. You will find your answers as you go through the story. Though it doesn’t hamper the story one bit and I am sure you will love him as you read more. Cons: 1. In the beginning of the story, especially around chapter 25, I made a decision that many didn’t like. I had a few things in mind that I failed to deliver, but please keep reading. I didn’t make that mistake again and even compromised for that previous mistake in the future. It wasn’t a wrong choice but I couldn’t provide enough information to give a basis for the decision. 2. Later on, I showed MC helping a couple of people or more, which many didn’t like, but later on I only focused on MC’s solo travel and stuff where he did most things by himself, rarely involving others. So if you find it annoying that he is helping a couple of ungrateful people for whatever reason, keep reading as the focus shifts pretty fast pretty soon in the next few chapters. 3. Next is… well I didn’t get any complaints whatsoever other than that, neither I found anything problematic. If I were to say one thing, it’s that I still haven’t shown any proper direction to the story, but I probably won’t be giving it right now as it’s a long story. For now, I will be focusing on adventure more compared to a final goal. So there is that. If you have any other questions, then please go ahead and ask. Good luck and happy reading!

SHODAN
SHODANLv2

I read all the free chapters because I really wanted to like this novel. At first, I thought the powers and the system were really cool and the MC, for the most part, used them well. It also has a nice pace since there were no useless chapters and the plot always kept advancing, but that's about everything nice I have to say about this novel. The biggest problem is the utterly unlikeable MC whose only saving grace are his powers. There's no "plot" other than the system and the zombie apocalypse. Which means the only thing we have to look forward to is the MC's development, but other than getting stronger, he gets progressively worse as the story develops. The MC is a pushover. At the beginning when he meets up with the first girl, he is somewhat decisive and stands his ground, but as the story goes on, he starts to become passive and submissive. He saves the lives of over 50 people and they begin to insult him and even one of them beats him up and he does nothing, he just stands there as they insult and hit him. He doesn't defend himself neither physically nor verbally. I used fast pass to unlock one of the paid chapters and realise I couldn't take it anymore. It's also the first smutty scene, I thought the girl was not a virgin because she ran laps around him and took the initiative in everything and had him shrieking like a little girl, but it turns out she was? I think he literally shrieked 3 times during that scene and could only resort to nod and answer her questions while she did all the job. Quite off-putting, honestly.

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