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2022-12-23 04:25

The story is a good one, and the pace of the story is going well in my opinion. However a few things I could say are maybe the editing part of the story, and adding something unique to the story that might make it different from others, so that comments such as "the story has nothing new" or anything similar comes up

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Thanks for the advice.

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