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R0BLv21yr
2023-12-16 22:03

It's just boring. Mc should spice the hp world up with his demon lineage and all, but all we get is random events happening around mc and the story about a demon. I hate it when author's change fanfic worlds for no reason at all.

Slytherin devil

Arthas_CaffeEther
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70 Chs

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Arthas_CaffeEther
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Thank you very much for your review. It's a shame that you found it boring. In general, the main idea behind the story was to do a lot of things in the Harry Potter universe, but with each chapter, things went into different territories. I also wanted to do some world-building and, of course, not rush things. For example, I spent almost 50 chapters on the first introductory arc. My inexperience and amateurism may have led me to create a boring progression pace. I'm approaching the end of the first arc where things happen in the world, and the main character reacts to them. In the second arc, the main character becomes more active, doing things for a purpose. Thank you anyway.

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Tyler_rigby
Tyler_rigbyLv4

the only think i and prob many other can complain about is the intelligence of the MC he's leaving his rituals out in the open near his home base

Arthas_CaffeEther:Thank you very much for your review. It's a shame that you found it boring. In general, the main idea behind the story was to do a lot of things in the Harry Potter universe, but with each chapter, things went into different territories. I also wanted to do some world-building and, of course, not rush things. For example, I spent almost 50 chapters on the first introductory arc. My inexperience and amateurism may have led me to create a boring progression pace. I'm approaching the end of the first arc where things happen in the world, and the main character reacts to them. In the second arc, the main character becomes more active, doing things for a purpose. Thank you anyway.
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I really can't see the story going far. the mc picked options from an app and then he is killed and sent to hp land. the mc chose a demon race with demon magic... so I have no idea how the whole hp verse is going to work for him since he has no "wizard magic" there is no way he is going to hogs. let's not say anything about the book at hogs, since he has no wizard magic only demon he won't show up in the book and won't get a letter to go to hogs and if he keeps leaving his demon8c ritual areas in the open and close to his place he l8ves he will die at an early age. writing is ok, mc is lazy so m7ch so he was a fat pig in the previous life and his sin is about being lazy so going to be another tubo again and he gave himself white hair and purple eyes like an idiot... hmm I am a demon so I should make myself stand out so much I get noticed.so ya read at your own risk

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