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2023-02-08 01:40

I enjoy the novel a lot BUT the title is completely miss leading ... The system the MC gets has NOTHING to do with Total war. It has nothing to do with the game Total War Warhammer or the act of declaring war to get stronger. Also it says stuck between DC and Marvel but he is in Warhammer (AU). The story so far has had very little to do with DC and Marvel. The system of his doesn't give him DC and Marvel or Warhammer stuff it gives him anything the Author can think of at that moment. He had 3 BIG worlds to choose from to give the MC rewards but says screw it and gives him things for Dragon Ball Z, random Cultivation Novels, Ben 10 and MORE!! Pick a lane please!! The novel should be called the random missions and rewards with a shop! The consistency of this novel is 0. But other than the lies of the title the novel itself is fine.

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Warcry_Ayms
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Thanks for pointing it out dude, I've been doing my best to figure out how to make the description of the fic fit in the story which I now plan later on. Though I started this due to release some stress but I now genuinely like the time I spent thinking and writing this fanfic. Things are still jumbled up as I plan to make thing fit and not be like some stories where the plot is quite forced upon the readers thus I have also spent time reading other fics to know which do's and don'ts I should follow. Honestly I am not quite adept in terms of writing and grammatical correctness but I will try and find ways to fit the description into the story. Thanks for the review dude...

wcpwnsuto
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I think the biggest issue is the MCs/the stories identity ... is it a mysterious shopkeeper story? ... Is it a conquerors story? ... a cultivation story? ... kingdom building story? ... a System centric story? ... Omniverse travel story? ... right now the story has a little bit of everything I just mentioned and seems to be bouncing around these "tropes" but not fleshing them out at all.

Warcry_Ayms:Thanks for pointing it out dude, I've been doing my best to figure out how to make the description of the fic fit in the story which I now plan later on. Though I started this due to release some stress but I now genuinely like the time I spent thinking and writing this fanfic. Things are still jumbled up as I plan to make thing fit and not be like some stories where the plot is quite forced upon the readers thus I have also spent time reading other fics to know which do's and don'ts I should follow. Honestly I am not quite adept in terms of writing and grammatical correctness but I will try and find ways to fit the description into the story. Thanks for the review dude...
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