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_Rockbison_
_Rockbison_Lv32yr
2022-10-24 19:53

Although its a very early time to review a story but still wanted to do it as l have already read this authors story and know how great she writes... This is is not any less from her previous novel... Liked the story and want to know more about it in the future.... But plzz do write the dialogues separately... As one person's dialogue in one paragraph... It wi be more easier for us to read... And as it is a very earlier stage so it won't take much time to fix it..... All the best... Hope it will also be a great work of urs...

WE CAN'T BE YOUR BROTHER ANYMORE

AYESHA_FAHIM
4.7
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AYESHA_FAHIM
AYESHA_FAHIMAuthor

Aw~ Thank you so much for your endearing comment,💕

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AYESHA_FAHIM
AYESHA_FAHIMAuthor

And lemme update the first chapter😜

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Axel_Ash
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The title of your book is super good no doubt, your plot is strong, I love your character arrangement, and I'm pretty sure your story will be super good.

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Maryam_Mayo
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There is only one chapter, so perhaps it's too early for a review, but I got captivated by the cover of course, but the synopsis was just the opposite which increased my interest. Furthermore the way you start the story form the childhood of all the characters, I think it will be easier for the readers to know the leading characters of your novels very well, and overall it was fun to read, keep writing waiting you to reveal other characters and chapters too. Good Luck for your new book :)

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onedaysomedayy
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Love the start of the novel! It's adorable with in-depth characters. The story is entertaining with great details and character dynamics. Can't wait for updates as the story progresses. Great job!

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Rin_Nurnia
Rin_NurniaLv4

The story is nice although I suggest you to separate the dialogues into new paragraphs. When you combined all of them in one paragraph, it's a bit confusing to read. A short example: "Dialogue," said Henry. (new paragraph) "Dialogue," Frankie smiled.

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_Carolina_writes_
_Carolina_writes_Lv4

I have read your book. The plot of your story is good. But there are more thing you need to know and work on your story to make it much better so that you can get contract.1. Synopsis: should summarize your story but it should be mysterious so that reader would be curious to read your book. 2. Grammatical mistake and dialogues improvement.Other than that your story plot is good if you correct these things you might get contract.

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somi_n
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I know it's a little too early to review but I just have to. Just reading the synopsis and first chapter got me immersed in this book. And I dropped romance novels a long time ago. I think the synopsis and first chapter just made me think twice about dropping romance novels. Great write up!

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Jenival_Enyia
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I love the way the author took me from the beginning of the book till the end. It shows the writing quality and thoughtfulness of the author and I can't wait to read more!

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Zhoa_Fei
Zhoa_FeiLv13

Overall there are something to be desired with the presentation of the story. The dialogue could be better separated and some of the run on sentences should be addressed. Though that doesn't mean that this story is inherently bad. It could just use some polishing. The meat of the story is very satisfying and the character relationships actually have life to them. I can buy them being together. Your intro chapter was really good.

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Moonwriting
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Curious to know more about the story..I already like the characters and the world you build around them is marvellous and [img=recommend]keep it up

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KiranAwan
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First of all, its synopsis is very well defined, From which the story can be determined.The start is commendable.👍😊 Hope it will be an interesting story, because the idea of ​​writing such a story does not come to everyone, so I appreciate your creativity and intelligence👏, As far as I am concerned, it will be fun while reading this story and now I would like to know more about how it goes up and down😎. So keep writing like this👀

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