Review Detail of Kana_Haisha in Dropped///

This review is based upon the first 5 chapters. Honestly, the opening is very strong and does an extremely good job at capturing the reader's interest and laying the groundwork to build upon that interest. However, it is broken up by grammatical errors, most notably the inconsistent changing of tenses, which really break up the flow of the novel. Phrasing and language choice is also a bit awkward at times, with certain descriptions being unnecessarily repeated (a thesaurus is a friend when you find yourself repeating descriptions). Despite this, the first chapter does leave the reader wanting more to some extent, but then they go to seek relief and find that the second chapter is entirely exposition and nothing else. It throws a ridiculous amount of terms and characters at the reader, and the reader feels obliged to remember them all. This isn't helped either by the choice to follow 3 different characters through the first 5 chapters, with Ch 2 being excluded for following no character (all exposition). All of this leads in a rather confusing experience for the reader. Overall, there is a lack of trust for the readers to understand new material as it shows up naturally in the story, and so it becomes exposition instead. Grammatical errors hold the writing back, especially the issues with tense. Lastly, there is generally too much going on, perhaps this improves as one gets further into the novel, but there are too many initial terms and names that the reader becomes utterly overwhelmed. With that being said, there is an interesting foundation, and the setting appears rather unique. The pacing, at times, is also very good, especially during fight scenes where play-by-play really sets the tone. All in all, I'd score this novel a tad below average, being held back by too much exposition and tense issues.