Don't drop... Good basis, can improve though. Haven't seen a gamer fic with ji han self insert in a long time. Keep writing and it will improve both your thinking process and writing skills.
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LIKEThe punctuation. That's most likely the errors in your grammar. You need some more commas and whatnot in your sentence, especially with character dialogue... And I would suggest adding quotations when a character is speaking. "Such as this. This would be character dialogue. Without the quotations, or any commas for that matter, it makes it difficult or annoying to read. Even my own grammar isn't perfect, but it is still eligible with punctuation."
Translator43532:Can you tell me where I am going wrong with my grammar