While the writing Quality is better than nearly anything I have read on Webnovel, the Story itself, especially the Mc, is probably one of the worst. First of all, I think the only reason you put a picture of Tom Riddle JR in there and let him be " transmigrated" as little Voldi is to get more Viewers because there are no, like 0% of similarities between the Mc and him. You might as well put an OC in this. Furthermore, this seems like an average Op, cringe-comedy, Mary Sue( I know, female version of the word, but I forgot the male version) FF. In the beginning, I could understand him trying to be friendly. I mean, little Voldi was the most social person in Hogwarts to make" friends " or to seem reliable. But the further we go into the Story, the more disappointed I become. Considering that the only thing you have to concentrate on is your Story and not the World Building, your grammar, character, or anything else that is already there, this disappointment only grows. First of all...Hufflepuff, seriously. This is like him screaming out loud in Voldemort's face " I am not your younger version" because Voldemort could get in any, literally any House other than Hufflepuff, the House of Loyalty, and leftovers. All in all, this is not a matter of personal preferences, but a case of " This Story is a disappointment for all those that expected something different"
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That's cool. Some of your criticism is valid, while there's a lot I'm choosing to ignore because it just doesn't resonate with the type of story I'm trying to write. That being said, I hope you find a better story to your liking elsewhere. Have a good day, and thanks for giving my story a chance!
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Urgh Hufflepuff.
Mary Sue=Gary Stue?
woah. .no experience in created and reader dynamicsbut you seem to be pretty good so I will give this a try
BS6SC:That's cool. Some of your criticism is valid, while there's a lot I'm choosing to ignore because it just doesn't resonate with the type of story I'm trying to write. That being said, I hope you find a better story to your liking elsewhere. Have a good day, and thanks for giving my story a chance!image
wait so he IS voldemort but younger? or is he his son?
Not everyone who is reborn as voldy needs to be complete trash of a human being at the same time Hufflpuff is one of the best houses on the top 4 of the show considering there is literally nothing wrong with it snakes are just prats gryphons are just dumb and charge headfirst and eagles are just shut ins who like to learn at least he got into a house that is diverse in personality and are hardworking
I assume you haven't read the Fanfic. The problem here is in the fact that the real Voldemort when Back in time and meets a Huffepuff him? I don't remember what he wanted from his younger self, but Voldemort wasn't your average nice, kinda, and all forgiving one. He would have Killed his younger self here and there.
Peryite:Not everyone who is reborn as voldy needs to be complete trash of a human being at the same time Hufflpuff is one of the best houses on the top 4 of the show considering there is literally nothing wrong with it snakes are just prats gryphons are just dumb and charge headfirst and eagles are just shut ins who like to learn at least he got into a house that is diverse in personality and are hardworking
That’s a whole paradox in itself bro he was so obsessed with not dying he split his soul into multiple pieces he wouldn’t take the chance of killing himself
Jasonenrick:I assume you haven't read the Fanfic. The problem here is in the fact that the real Voldemort when Back in time and meets a Huffepuff him? I don't remember what he wanted from his younger self, but Voldemort wasn't your average nice, kinda, and all forgiving one. He would have Killed his younger self here and there.
You really don't get the gist of what I am saying here, so I just let you be thinking what you think is correct.
Peryite:That’s a whole paradox in itself bro he was so obsessed with not dying he split his soul into multiple pieces he wouldn’t take the chance of killing himself
I get the gist of what ur saying u just won’t accept what I’m saying
Jasonenrick:You really don't get the gist of what I am saying here, so I just let you be thinking what you think is correct.
Yeaaaah. You say Hufflepuff is in the Top 4 of all houses. Now my question: To be in the Top 4 when there are only 4 houses doesn’t seem to be such an achievement to me??
Peryite:Not everyone who is reborn as voldy needs to be complete trash of a human being at the same time Hufflpuff is one of the best houses on the top 4 of the show considering there is literally nothing wrong with it snakes are just prats gryphons are just dumb and charge headfirst and eagles are just shut ins who like to learn at least he got into a house that is diverse in personality and are hardworking
Furthermore how would you know about the diverse personalities when they were not really a part of the story. There were like only 4 different hufflepuffs in all of the books. That’s seems like groundless interpretation from your side with no proof whatsoever. That’s like saying all houses other than gryffindor are thrash because they are cowards or all houses other than ravenclaw are thrash because they are stupid
Peryite:Not everyone who is reborn as voldy needs to be complete trash of a human being at the same time Hufflpuff is one of the best houses on the top 4 of the show considering there is literally nothing wrong with it snakes are just prats gryphons are just dumb and charge headfirst and eagles are just shut ins who like to learn at least he got into a house that is diverse in personality and are hardworking
