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Fallen_Angel_88
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2023-03-07 20:07

This contains actual spoilers read risk Intresting story with intresting characters and world with the most unique aspect of the story in my opinion has to be the magic system but I will get into that later and truthfully has been one of the best stories I have read so good job author and keep up the good work Main Character(only talking about the very beginning): The personality at the beginning is as you would expect from an abused child that just wants recognition from her parents and tries to gain their approval by expelling at her studies (only to be met with harsh abuse) though her main intrest (outside of gaining recognition in the first 15 or so chapters) is profiling, magic, and gardening which in the story shows she’s actually intelligent (though her actual knowledge of social interactions and current history is shallow) which get shown in the theoretical knowledge of magic and ability to profile people World Building: I suck at explaining this type of stuff but I can say with certainty say that the pacing doesn’t feel drawn out and slow but it’s not rushed either and takes the time to properly explain what it needs to Love Intrest: it’s confirmed she’s a yandere and better yet the main character loves the feeling of her possessing her soo their a perfect match in that sense. Some of the more important things to note is that the main character isn’t the only broken soul in the novel Losing her entire family and being forced into a position of power within the empire(Archdutchess) she not only has to deal with politics but also has to ‘control’ her instincts (her powers are centered around embracing her instincts which lead to some intresting events) as she navigates being in love for the first time(though she did play around with other girls before she met the mc but never loved them) Magic System: One of the most important aspects of any fantasy novel the author went and created a masterpiece here. First the magic is broken down into a few things but the most important is the “Aspect”. Aspects are the elements(the same ones that can be found in other fantasy stories) define the scope of their magic (example- mc grandfathers aspect was summer sunlight from this we are informed that the elements he has are fire and light). Second we got bloodlines which are both important and not as this does have an affect on their aspects but doesn’t fully define it(aspects include both bloodline and life experiences which determines what said aspect well be) they can be used in what’s called schema to power their spells. And onto the most important part of this system of magic is the Schema. Schema is the method of using said magic and is not defied on what your bloodline is or what your aspect is though the efficiency of the schema is so it better to pair it with your aspect and bloodline and can be broke down into three different types; Innate Schema which relied on the bloodline but lacks flexibility for potency, Channeling Schema uses the surrounding energy to cast and use so form of medium lacks potency but makes up for it with flexibility and versatility, and last but not least, Constructive Schema which is a highly structured and formulated magic which requires the user to be able to formulate how a spell works based on certain variables they often require runes or sigils (all of this is explained in the story a lot better than what I gave it). Aspects can be as complicated as ‘flickering shadows’ to ‘cherry blossoms in an endless storm’ and when paired with the schema and bloodline can result in some amazing spells

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AngelAsphodel
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Thank you so much for the review. Seeing you so enthusiastic really helps encourage me too and I'll keep working hard to make sure your praise remains well earned! Thank you for reading so far and all of your support!

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Thank you for the amazing novel

AngelAsphodel:Thank you so much for the review. Seeing you so enthusiastic really helps encourage me too and I'll keep working hard to make sure your praise remains well earned! Thank you for reading so far and all of your support!
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This was very helpful. Gonna give it a shot brb

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AngelAsphodel
AngelAsphodelAuthor

This novel is my first, and I've learned and grown a great deal since I started writing it. I expect I'll continue to grow as well, but already I can say that this is something I can feel pride for. Beyond giving myself a good review score though, I do want to officially write a review for myself and hopefully use this as a moment to reflect on myself. Writing Quality: I recognize that I can be wordy and my love of commas can certainly lead to longer sentences than typically found in webnovels. Despite that, I feel that my grammar is typically consistent and I personally enjoy having a writing style that is distinct from many other novels I have read. While those other novels are something I love, I want to stand apart from them while still learning from them, and I feel that I have succeeded in that regard. In addition to grammar and general structure, I find that I genuinely enjoy my own writing when I read it back, and I enjoy my own jokes and descriptions. Naturally, these still have plenty of room to grow, but I am already very happy with my style and the substance of my writing. Stability of Updates: This is my greatest weakness and this is where I dock points from myself. I average 1 to 2 chapters a week, though I have done more in the past. My tendency to get overwhelmed and burnt out prevents me from writing as much as I wish I could, and it is the main place I wish I could improve. Story Development: In terms of story development I tend towards a slower pace and, while this isn't inherently bad, it does make it harder to judge my writing in this category. As the author I know where the story is headed, but there are times I worry that the slow pace might obscure that from the reader. Nevertheless, I always try to be aware of pacing, creating new mini arcs to split up the larger overarching arcs, and introducing new characters, creatures, worldbuilding, and fleshing out the mysteries in the story in hopes of always keeping things fresh. Character Design: My admission of guilt is that many characters I create are based on aspects of myself. That makes them easier and more fun for me to write, while I continue to try and flesh them out to make them more than the piece of me they initially come from. I like my characters and, in a way, they're my children; of course I'm proud! However I recognize that they are not as complex and fleshed out as characters in a proper drama. I try to make an effort to flesh out each character over time, using interactions and occasionally entire chapters to help make them more complex and interesting. It must be understood however that the novel focusses more on how the characters interact with the world and their circumstances, instead of simply being a purely character based drama. From my point of view, my characters are well made and serve their purposes well in my narrative, though they might lack that final spark of life: something I intend to slowly fix as each character gets more time to develop. World Building: Finally, the last category to talk about. In terms of my world, I'm still actively fleshing things out and I know that there is still plenty that even I don't know about my own setting, however I also believe that worldbuilding might be the strongest part of my novel other than the cohesive narrative itself. I try to make the worldbuilding part of the story instead of merely a backdrop and I interweave mysteries and key aspects of the plot into the world itself. I've also attempted to drip feed the world building in hopes that there are fewer info dumps and that, in cases where exposition is necessary, I always try to make it interesting and fit naturally into the story. Without a doubt, plenty more still needs to be revealed in my story's setting, but what I have right now is already something I view at intriguing and a strong foundation and I hope that my readers feel the same. And that's my author review! I wrote this after publishing chapter 170 and I know there's still plenty more story to come. I'll admit that my review score here may be biased. Nonetheless, I am incredibly proud of this novel and am just very very happy to have had the chance to write it and share it with others. It's the first thing I've ever created and felt proud of, so I hope that those who read it enjoy it with me. This review was largely self reflection and avoided spoilers but if anyone reads this and has questions about my own thoughts on more specific parts of my novel, feel free to comment on this review and I'd be happy to discus. I'm not sure if this review was helpful or insightful, but still, thank you for your interest in my novel and I hope you enjoy what you read.

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