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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv142yr
2022-11-17 12:30

Not a bad story but there is still much to be desired. The MC suddenly turns into a cold, indifferent MC, serisl killer who claims to love his family but consistently lies to them. he use to be worried about the the consequences. The author seems very childish. Basically adding the gamers mind to kill off any personality he had. actions seemingly contradicting each other in very extreme ways. A lot goes overlooked by people around him. very obvious stuff and concerning questions any good parent should force their kids to answer. However, I do appreciate the characters chosen for the chat. id love to see Iroh get his son back. The grammar and all around English is at an acceptable level and I havent given up on the story hoping that it'll improve in the future.

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omnioutergod
omnioutergodLv14

I like it im be giving you five star I don't rank the story before it finished

DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

if it gets better ill definitely erase and write a better one but if it gets worse then ill leave the rating and move on. It's not a bad thing to review and rate a story early as long as it can changed later if deserving. It can help as long as there is one thing constructive that can be taken from the review.

omnioutergod:I like it im be giving you five star I don't rank the story before it finished
DyingAllTheTime
DyingAllTheTimeLv4

Mind telling me your opinion of the fic now lol

DetachedDreamer:if it gets better ill definitely erase and write a better one but if it gets worse then ill leave the rating and move on. It's not a bad thing to review and rate a story early as long as it can changed later if deserving. It can help as long as there is one thing constructive that can be taken from the review.
Linus279
Linus279Lv4

For me, the harem has completely ruined it. Alone in the first arc, he gets 5 girls, all in all, is just another story that is bad because of the harem

DyingAllTheTime:Mind telling me your opinion of the fic now lol
DyingAllTheTime
DyingAllTheTimeLv4

Did you see the dxd harem list? The second I saw it I dropped this fic honestly

Linus279:For me, the harem has completely ruined it. Alone in the first arc, he gets 5 girls, all in all, is just another story that is bad because of the harem
Life_sa_Beach
Life_sa_BeachLv4

Dimensional chat group story , what did you even expect . This is more like a wish fulfilment so a big harem should be the least of your worries , anyways i don't care how big the harem is as long it doesn't get cringy or edgy and there are a lot of bad decision making . As long as it's entertaining for me and helps me pass my time I don't mind

Linus279:For me, the harem has completely ruined it. Alone in the first arc, he gets 5 girls, all in all, is just another story that is bad because of the harem
Linus279
Linus279Lv4

There are some cringe names for moves he shouted

Life_sa_Beach:Dimensional chat group story , what did you even expect . This is more like a wish fulfilment so a big harem should be the least of your worries , anyways i don't care how big the harem is as long it doesn't get cringy or edgy and there are a lot of bad decision making . As long as it's entertaining for me and helps me pass my time I don't mind
Life_sa_Beach
Life_sa_BeachLv4

Some cringe should be manageable as long as it doesn't evolve to the point where you have to cringe every single paragraph

Linus279:There are some cringe names for moves he shouted
Zenon00125
Zenon00125Lv2

I think it's realistic if you could resolve things with violence without being weaker would you try to talk? mainly that these weak beings are your enemies the story shows that anyone with power becomes a tyrant those who do not become puppets of others since everyone around you will only go to you either you use them or they use you , power corrupts hahahaha

Azrael_DAngel
Azrael_DAngelLv14

can you tell me if it's slow pace Romance before adding them to harem or just Pokemon type where they fall for each other just in two chapters after meeting

Linus279:For me, the harem has completely ruined it. Alone in the first arc, he gets 5 girls, all in all, is just another story that is bad because of the harem
Linus279
Linus279Lv4

At the beginning show but then Pokemon style

Azrael_DAngel:can you tell me if it's slow pace Romance before adding them to harem or just Pokemon type where they fall for each other just in two chapters after meeting
Azrael_DAngel
Azrael_DAngelLv14

ughhh and he say it is slow paced

Linus279:At the beginning show but then Pokemon style
masterkiritojj
masterkiritojjLv2

Is there Yuri in this novel?

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