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rthreatt
rthreattLv17mth
2024-09-27 05:02

Liked the overall story, the various different cases, the small charcter development and pulling in different part of the cyberpunk world but the story gets distracting when there are writing errors or misspelled names/words. I would appreciate it if you would let me edit the story to fix those errors.

Cyberpunk 2077- Trauma team

Abi_Daulen
4.4
86 Chs

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Abi_Daulen
Abi_DaulenAuthor

Thanks for help. Start editing with my blessing 😅 if you need something send a message.

7mth
rthreatt
rthreattLv1

No problem man, gonna write two versions of the first chapter when I get power back. One with added detail and one with just fixed grammar and see which the readers want.

Abi_Daulen:Thanks for help. Start editing with my blessing 😅 if you need something send a message.
7mth
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rthreatt
rthreattLv1

Uploaded first chapter, think its better but probably need to make the thoughts more natural later.

Abi_Daulen:Thanks for help. Start editing with my blessing 😅 if you need something send a message.
7mth
Abi_Daulen
Abi_DaulenAuthor

Good work. Keep going ! Although you added and changed things a lot this may Add charm to work.

rthreatt:Uploaded first chapter, think its better but probably need to make the thoughts more natural later.
7mth
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Batcard
BatcardLv14

MC somehow gets to Cyberpunk 2077 world or a few years before at least. Hasn’t gotten to “canon” but anyway he joins Trauma Team and we get to see the crazy stuffs Trauma Team gets to deal with every day. I love the situations and story. MC is slowly getting his “build” together and I can’t wait for more chapters!

2yr

AnotherAtlas
AnotherAtlasLv2

The grammar makes me look twice every two seconds to see if I misread something. The story is forced bs, i'd rather he had transmigrated directly into a newbie of the trauma team. The mc's reactions are generic and cringy. Also the whole "I predicted that i'm in trouble cause of a bad feeling" trope is a bit overused, especially in non supernatural power worlds. It's like what, did you unlock ultra instinct or something?

2yr
Darkmusho
DarkmushoLv14

I can't wait to see what you do with this considering there's not that many cyberpunk fanfics out there. keep up the amazing work I'm rooting for you all the way

2yr
Zaelum
ZaelumLv5

Not bad. Hopefully we can see an end to this fanfic. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

2yr
ThatOneGUy
ThatOneGUyLv13

Book is fine, author needs to touch up in grammar though, some characters speak like cavemen and the writing is inconsistent when it comes to proper grammar, punctuation and vocabulary, the author I also suggest should do some more research into firearms, the technical details of them, and weapons in general.. Writing quality is down to a 3 due to authors grammar inconsistentcy World background as well due to his clear lack of knowledge of military tactics and weapons and lack of research..

2yr
Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

The concept of the fanfic is good, but fix your grammar first, bye

2yr
Slushy_Apollo
Slushy_ApolloLv15

Overall a good novel but the grammar is beyond awful

1yr
moonlitsummer
moonlitsummerLv15

I don’t write many of these reviews but I have to say this is a great novel. The author brought the character into the world a little off, but the growth and struggle while having a dark sense of humor that you would hear in the field helps paint vivid and interesting characters.

2yr
SomethingMalefic
SomethingMaleficLv2

Just writing this review because I've kind of lost interest because of the fact that he will probably leave trauma team. I'm not sure if he does because I've not read that far but its the main reason I liked this fanfic, it was cool and unique to see a trauma team members daily life and without that its not as unique.

2yr
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