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2022-10-03 15:50

Really good job with everything so far. Long chapters, nothing too op or anything that doesn’t make sense, and writing quality is good. In general your doing an excellent job of inserting the OC into the world, and at some point I hope to see the mc getting mazakas memories. Keep it up.

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Author is probably less then 17, the SI is well better not be mentioned how bad, unrealistic and childish it is, can't ignore stuff like that, i don't know why authors think that people who lose their family NEEDS to cope with it throughout their lives and the loss is not something that someone can grow out of easily but things don't work the way your imaginative mind comes out with, it makes the SI seem like a pathetic guy that can't get over it, the dark humour is imposed to the story like you have thought this like some game, i imagine it like this, you wanted a tragic background so the orphan thing came then you thought let's give him a dark humour and self talking out loud as personality deficit so the reason should be him being depressed as a young orphan that can't keep going with the loss of his family hence the coping mechanism, i really don't know what is going on with authors in this site but, people are always depicted in their extreme, too emotional or none at all, too expressive or none at all, justice doer or evil doer, apathetic or someone who simply can't help but involve himself to a situation, it's like they need to be on a side nothing between and the choice is mostly on the side that would create more conflict despite the stupidity in the choice or unrealism of it or out of character it is, like easily angered over simple stuff, ignoring a situation that would obviously lead to a misunderstanding or a conflict till the problem needs to be solved in an ' interesting' way etc. this might entertain some but to me it seems forced lazy plot.

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