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JellyInc
JellyIncLv32yr
2022-10-06 07:07

I'd say this a good story, though the updates are a bit irregular, some parts are a bit cringe worthy(that could be fixed with a few words or if the order was changed), not really sure about character development, but so far so good. I recommend this FF. Not perfect, but not bad either. First, technically 6 chapters and it's not bad.

Is it wrong to be a Shrine Maiden Kitsune in a Dungeon?

TempestNotion
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TempestNotion
TempestNotionAuthor

I'm still a novice, so my writing skill is not refined

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JellyInc
JellyIncLv3

Sorry if I offended you in any way, but I hope my small bit of criticism can help you on your journey to become a better writer

TempestNotion:I'm still a novice, so my writing skill is not refined
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Uchiha_Ichigo
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I don't get this whole genderbent thing, I would just make them a woman who reincarnates, but story is good so 🤷

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TempestNotion
TempestNotionAuthor

I don't want to be shameless to myself, but I really deserve a pat on the back for trying so hard to write a fanfic. I may not be a professional writer, but I am a writer nonetheless. I am starting to understand some writing techniques and hoping to refine my skill in the future.

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John_Ryan_8278
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it's good but ultimate it is too early to judge it properly but I like the mc and the father but I feel it is a bit rushed but that is understandable considering it is a fanfiction that has not yet got to the fanfictiony bits yet the only thing that sticks out to me as really rushed or forced would be the conflict about some food or something and how the father who was acting very close to his daughter didn't even give her a chance to explain her self and he just gave her to someone else and he ask his dead wife where he went wrong like idk maybe giving someone else your daughter might be a good point overall its good I just hope the author stays away from all this unnecessary drama that doesn't make much sense as I said tho it is good and I only was negative about this part of the story cuz that the only really bad part

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Christ_Apostle
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not my cup of tea.......................

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