Hohoho! Now... this is epic. This story has great promise. Peak fiction potential even. So let me give my little, humble advice for the Author: Try to get your writing as clean as possible, I would especially advice you to put the conversations with great sage in brackets or these: ' '. Make it enjoyable to read and give it a clean feeling, do not worry tho, you are close. Next one is: make a clear schedule for updates, it's best if you don't overwork yourself. Especially because writing a good story needs inspiration and a healthy mind. Believe me if I say that 2 - 3 chapters a week are completely okay, even only one is enough to get the story going. Next advise: Try to keep your own style and don't let yourself be pressured, there are times where readers will want things from you and sometimes it gets too much, better ignore the ones that seem unreasonable and don't take suggestions that you think are hard, or just impossible to implement. Haters will be haters. Last one: This one is very important to keep the story going... please envision the end of the storyline clearly and especially one you feel good with. I have seen a few Authors who just wrote stories with a passion, good stories even, but just couldn't imagine the ending, which made them lose motivation. Some of them are hardly active anymore, unfortunately. So I can only hope that I may soon add another story to my 'peak fiction' folder. Peace.

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