Review Detail of Zherie17 in Bounded by the shackles of fate

Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours. Story wise, it has an amazing plot though: 1. Grammar control needs to be rechecked since punctuation marks are all over the place. 2. You could revise add a prologue to make an interesting impact/impression to attract readers. So far, that is all. Again, thank you and best of luck to you.