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MonoPoli
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2023-07-06 07:09

Relatable I am also untalented.

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is there romance??

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Frozentech
FrozentechLv11

The Kingdom Building series presents a captivating storyline, but there are certain aspects that require further clarification and development. Allow me to address your concerns regarding the plot: Arquebus: The lack of explanation regarding barrel production and the manual manufacturing of arquebuses raises questions about the feasibility and efficiency of such processes without advanced machinery or smelting techniques. Cannons: The absence of a comprehensive explanation regarding the creation of cannons, especially cast iron cannons, leaves uncertainty about the availability of necessary resources, such as coal, for their construction. Gunpowder: The origin of saltpeter, a vital component of gunpowder, is not adequately addressed in the narrative. It is essential to establish a believable source of saltpeter and sulfur for sustained large-scale ammunition production. Steam Engine: While the introduction of a steam engine is intriguing, the story lacks details about its creation and the protagonist's ability to manufacture precise parts without access to machine tools or advanced engineering techniques. Blackout: The abilities and capabilities of the Blackout group, particularly their exceptional infiltration skills, may seem overly powerful and not fully explained within the context of the medieval setting. Russell: The abrupt transformation of Russell from a peaceful painter to a murderer lacks proper character development and motivation. It would benefit the story to establish dissatisfaction or conflicts within Russell's life before depicting him as someone capable of such actions. Travel: The ease with which characters traverse between different countries without established roads raises questions about the feasibility and time constraints involved. Additionally, the annual meetings of Blackout members, requiring extensive travel, seem logistically challenging in the absence of efficient transportation systems. Overall, while the Kingdom Building series offers an engaging plot, there is room for improvement in providing more detailed explanations and addressing the logical and technical aspects of the depicted time period and technological advancements.

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