Item: Havilah's reign of terror
Rating: 3.8
Author: Crow_Fog

Crow_FogLv12yr

2022-09-25 22:38

The story is great. Can develop in many ways, i.e., it has great potential. Author you're doing a great job. It's just that your characters do not have depth and your grammar is umm... a little weak. I'm sorry if it felt bad. But if you want to improve, I think you should write small essays on a subject. use Grammarly or word tune, though i never used either so I am really qualified to give this advice to you. But just don't stop. You can do it. You can tell your story to the world.

Havilah's reign of terror

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