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2022-10-04 20:19

Nice, you write well without showing too many mistakes in grammar or punctuation. i like the way youre taking this on the characters. i too am not a fan of 1 dimensional villains or characters that simply have one quirk that defines their whole persona. The world could be described more intricately but i believe youve done a good job. keep writing ✍️

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Though the whole necromancer who can teleport is a bit much, no? Lol

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Thanks, I will try to keep your advice in mind for future descriptions of the world.

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LemnAuthor

Regarding the necromancer, he is quite a powerful character, perhaps a bit exaggerated if you are not used to this kind of story, in this world, there are wars that involve a lot of power. Obviously, he is not an initial character, but he is important in the story.

Violet_Ivory:Though the whole necromancer who can teleport is a bit much, no? Lol
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