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NowGoWithTheFlow
NowGoWithTheFlowLv142yr
2022-09-14 10:01

Well you have a good idea about the novel but there are many problems with this. First is the info dumps if it was just every once in awhile it be fine but 3 chapters in a row are large info dumps. Second you can read the sentence but the sentences are clearly badly written. Third it is to rushed from the start. Fourth some of your ranks in my opinion are mixed up. Also your MC who is he what's MC name there isn't much character building but I will chalk that up to less than 13 chapters are available to read.

Heaven defying lottery system ; Trapped for 1,00,000 years !

Sun_Jinwoo
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Sun_Jinwoo
Sun_JinwooAuthor

i am new writer and i write in class to time pass however i will try to improve no worry mate .

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NowGoWithTheFlow
NowGoWithTheFlowLv14

Don't stop writing when receiving these comments. Because even great books I have read on here they get better as they write.

Sun_Jinwoo:i am new writer and i write in class to time pass however i will try to improve no worry mate .
2yr
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Celestial_Chaos24
Celestial_Chaos24Lv4

Why try to have other male characters besides the MC in this story if the enemy isn't right, but this? It's too much male friend interference Try and he's not who he's just his friend's son his father Then the MC also doesn't know him, why did you bring him? I'm Confused That This Novel Is And I'm Lazy To Read What It's Like And also the grammar is a bit messy so lazy to read it bro. Good Luck Brother Because I'm Lazy To Read If There Are Male Characters On The Way Novel Harem Story Don't Be Offended Yes If I Drop This Novel Bye Brother Good Luck Brother Write it And GOD BLESS YOU BROTHER AND KEEP SPIRIT BROTHER

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OBEYDE_X
OBEYDE_XLv4

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DaoistKingsom
DaoistKingsomLv11

Reveal spoiler

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Shade08
Shade08Lv4

confusing story where the MC is trapped in his own world and even after so long I do not see any special thing about him. after so many rewards MC is inductively using any and he just changes the world without exploring his previous one. I'll see the author had an imagination but it was a bit exaggerated as multiple system users coming in and out every single day.

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Azareth_Hades
Azareth_HadesLv13

it's not bad though it would have been nice for u to continue

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