NowGoWithTheFlow

What's going on i am confused. The plot is intriguing but the execution of novel is a failure. The pacing all over the place an your pov is even there. Also I don't even know at what point MC has entered one piece. There are also plot holes like did you skip little garden an nami getting sick. The MC interaction with strawhats feels like talking to robots than actual people.

Skip chpater 1 will save you time an confusion. Why don't you keep the original zombie from high school of the dead. Instead you got left for dead type of zombie with umbrella organization. If you stick with the original work an thought sharing mc plot it would be a great read an I would have given this 5 star but instead of that you made this a shit show with so many plot holes an confusion an don't know what's happening this becomes unreadable to the point I just delete this.

5 stars untill chapter 30. MC know for a fact that joining anbu will be bad for him an still joins anyway. The story from then on becomes more stale an predictable, like every other naruto fanfic out there. Makes me believe author doesn't know what to write so he wrote that. Besides that this novel has great grammar an long chapters, fast updates an a interesting plot intill chapter 30. While the insertion of MC may need more work it's doable. The MC hasn't much of a persona yet but feels OK for now. A ok read to pass the time.

There is no life in this MC at all. The system has more personality than the MC. If you take the MC out of book it just be the original dragon ball. There is no change in story. The MC has no character or personality. Why hasn't the MC get into a relationship with Bluma, she's rich an MC can live the lazy life he wants with her? This novel has no futrue because no change to original plot.

Rage bait. Not much storytelling at all. The only way the Author can write plot is to write rage bait writing. The MC is dump an MC does even dumber stuff. The parents make dumb decisions, while MC was supposed to be a adult in child's body an know plot, which both are questionable. MC acts like a 4 year old an basically has no knowledge to improve his life in any significant way. The grammar is ok, the chapters updates are fast, chapters are long. The plot an the way this is written is horrible. The MC is horrible, an terrifying child problem. Not much the MC besides being a child, making dump decisions an pranks. Don't really know what the MC really like at all. I tried to read this an pushed myself to get to chapter 20 but no more I am done. This needs to be rewritten.

wrong the mera mera no mi is more powerful than the mag mag fruit. Ace just didn't have the time to properly train said fruit. Also Sakazuki has had years of training his fruit an haki before Ace even had his, not only that Ace didn't have much Haki with very little time to even train haki. Ace fruit Mera Mera no mi is about temperature, just make a mini sun like escanar from 7 deadly sins.

I try reading this many times but couldn't ever fi d the resolve to finish it. The MC changes nothing of note. If you take the MC out it just be the original naruto. MC had many chances to change plot but never did. The whole self insert an knowing plot MC trope only works when you actually write changes to the story. To the point it's a whole new story. Ok to pass the time reading this though still not wroth it.

Don't recommend reading this. The translation is bad, I could go read this at mtl because mtl is better than this. The grammar is horrible an the chapters are mixed up. Pls author if you do translation in the future read what you translate an you will do better.

What the fu## is this? I don't understand what's going on. Also this sounds like medieval ages war instead of DXD devils an magic. You might as well remove the DXD title because this doesn't resemble at all. Chapters are long updates are ok I still don't know who the MC is? The plot is trash, I couldn't understand what was going on. What magic oh.. there isn't any. Don't recommend this.

Great book keep it up. Chapters updates are slow though. Chapter length is long. Grammar is great. MC is likable an great character development.