The story is decent. Starts off like most HP stories. Real problems lie with the intent of the story. EVERYTHING is overshadowed by the authors hate of HP fanfics. it seaps into every part of this story. lots of whining and crying masked as some self righteous authority over what should and shouldn't be in a hp fanfic. he hates anything he deems not factual to hp Canon unless its his own brand of bull. as long as it fits in his narrative. Very hypocritical sometimes. if you were to extract all that from this story you'd find a decently developing story that has a bright future. but its still early and could develop in any direction. hopefully this author can let go of his hate. it ain't good to be mad! cheer up!

Author's Review here, this is my first time writing a fanfic after reading so many. Hope it will satisfy me and you alike. Enjoy😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁

Really great start to this fic. Not many good HP fanfics on this platform. Couldn't even tell English isn't your first language. You've done well not falling into the more cliche tropes. Love that while sticking to canon, you have recognised that things will change due to his presence. How you manage the changes and flow of effects of MCs presence will be the difference between this being a good fic and a great fic. Keep up the good work.

One of the best Harry Potter fanfict on this site, very well written and I also really like the main character. Usually either they interfere too much or don't do anything at all; here, the way he does things is perfect, I really like it. One suggestion would be the grammar (easily fixable) and to leave the author notes at the end of the chapter; there is no need to explain your decisions in the middle of the chapter or why you changed some things. Putting them at end makes it so that the flow of the story and immersion doesn't get interrupted. Really liked it, waiting for more!

I think this is very good and mc is in line with my taste, he is not naive, smart, not too obsessed with the main character and rushes to contact them. Anyway I recommend you guys To read this

Loving it so far! I think you should have OC look into rituals, and ask the ROR for books on it.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

To be honest, I am one of those people that romance can make a fic more immersive for me, when it is an Oc that is not reincarnated no matter the age of the partner he chooses, but being reincarnated and older, for mental health it is better to choose someone a little older, and I say all this because FLEUR FLEUR FLEUR FLEUR hahaha

I'm sorry I can't read your book anymore!?. I read translation with an assistant. now the site requires you to download the application but there is no translator I hope you post it on other sites

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