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ThurioDek
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2024-04-28 15:35

I started read because of webnovel recommendation and discover the book history is abandoned. Sad.

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Writing Quality : Its good than 90% of the novels out there, although I've seen some types here and there. The POV shifts annoy me though because they are not my kind of thing (not saying they are bad but I'm not one of the POV shift liker no matter the novel Story Development :Story Development is good, not too many plot holes Character Design : The characters are designed well although i feel every character except the Mc is 2D (especially the children), at least until where i have read yet. But i do feel the protagonist's monologues annoying (which i will explain later) Updating Stability : Not much i know about it mate! World Background : The World Background is being built slowly but i feel like not much about the geography and terrain is talked about. Like, is everything around jungle? are there dense trees around or plains? etc. Now onto what i feel is lacking : The characters except Mc are a little too 2D, you should try to work on it. As for working stability, its always the more the better. Now the most crucial thing or annoying thing I find, the mc spends half or full chapter making a choice in monologues stating and unnecessary explaining the obvious and giving useless info. For example : 'I don't know if there's a higher Civilization' this sentence is repeated in almost every chapter and sometimes even more than once. A lot useless info is given in chapters and sometimes the useful part in a chapter is only worth 1 or 2 paragraphs. I know that some filler needs to be there to make the novel longer but i hope there is a balance ( like 50% is useful and 50% filler in a chapter from now's 75% filler at least in the chapters I'm reading currently). I'm saying this because sometimes its painful watching the character spending such long time on obvious decisions. That's all.

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