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RaumeLv112yr
2023-02-11 11:42

I am in chapter 68, I am afraid of one thing, and that is that you start to nerf the growth of the MC so that the others can catch up, for example with Brother Brian, we already know that the MC is more intelligent, a martial artist, physically an athlete , legendary class, and even so you leave a feeling like the brother will catch up, and the worst thing about this is that to catch up you will literally retard the growth of the MC or start giving Buffs to everyone, it is not necessary that the others are close to him in power, there are more things than power that are necessary, and if you keep wanting to match the others with the MC it's only more desperate. An example of the above is when the MC is described as athletic and a martial genius, his base body is already above 90% of the world, and now by level he goes up he is stronger, but out of nowhere you say that Chris has close to his damage power when he is a child and there is 0 chance that he will get close to his damage, for example, Ace strength multiplier by levels: N1-20 N2-40 N3-80 being Level one his base strength, now put For a child his base strength would be N1-10 N2-20 N3-40, and so at least at the beginning without training between levels, please stop comparing when it's far to start

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Emmanuel_Peter203
Emmanuel_Peter203Author

I understand where you're coming from, but don't worry; your concerns are completely unnecessary because I won't neft the mc. In fact, the mc growth is about to take off in the chapters I'm currently writing. And, to clarify, I was not attempting to compare his teammates to him. What was going on there was me telling the readers about the potential damage they could cause if they used it. It's similar to how Anna is with an Epic grade skill that hasn't revealed its true power. Consider this: If you look at the team, only Ace has less special powers than the girls, but even so, he is still on top, so don't worry about my mc.

Raume
RaumeLv11

That's fine, and another point I had is that I hope he doesn't refuse to use magic, it's fine that he's martial, but at the end of the day only magic has the potential to achieve city-destroying power at the lowest levels. , 1vs1 I understand that you prefer weapons, but for mobs, magic is the best, only a fundamental point of this is efficiency. And another thing, if you want help with small details or with plot logic (for example, when you arrive at a type of scenario in which you can use a certain ability to pass it and you don't do it either because of the plot, or because you are already aware of many things) I can do it for free, at least until the chapter I'm in I feel that this fic is worth more than the first positions And it helps, I don't mean to change your idea, but to help the logic that connects point A with point B to get to C, or for reactions to certain actions

Emmanuel_Peter203:I understand where you're coming from, but don't worry; your concerns are completely unnecessary because I won't neft the mc. In fact, the mc growth is about to take off in the chapters I'm currently writing. And, to clarify, I was not attempting to compare his teammates to him. What was going on there was me telling the readers about the potential damage they could cause if they used it. It's similar to how Anna is with an Epic grade skill that hasn't revealed its true power. Consider this: If you look at the team, only Ace has less special powers than the girls, but even so, he is still on top, so don't worry about my mc.
Emmanuel_Peter203
Emmanuel_Peter203Author

No problem and Thanks fir the review. And for the part of helping out with ideas, I don't know mind that but for that to happen you'll have to be in the lastest chapter lol but am open to any idea you have now and once again, I thank you for the review and saying your thoughts.

Raume
RaumeLv11

You are the author, I do not want to change your ideas of the story, I mean more what already happens in the chapter Or even plot ideas if you want. An example of small things would be like for example (at least in the chapters I'm in) use the raven more, not only as a scout or to attack, if you say that they can be dispersed, it invites a lot of uses, mount, charge, perimeter, battle formations, even as marksmanship training

Emmanuel_Peter203:No problem and Thanks fir the review. And for the part of helping out with ideas, I don't know mind that but for that to happen you'll have to be in the lastest chapter lol but am open to any idea you have now and once again, I thank you for the review and saying your thoughts.
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Writing Quality : Its good than 90% of the novels out there, although I've seen some types here and there. The POV shifts annoy me though because they are not my kind of thing (not saying they are bad but I'm not one of the POV shift liker no matter the novel Story Development :Story Development is good, not too many plot holes Character Design : The characters are designed well although i feel every character except the Mc is 2D (especially the children), at least until where i have read yet. But i do feel the protagonist's monologues annoying (which i will explain later) Updating Stability : Not much i know about it mate! World Background : The World Background is being built slowly but i feel like not much about the geography and terrain is talked about. Like, is everything around jungle? are there dense trees around or plains? etc. Now onto what i feel is lacking : The characters except Mc are a little too 2D, you should try to work on it. As for working stability, its always the more the better. Now the most crucial thing or annoying thing I find, the mc spends half or full chapter making a choice in monologues stating and unnecessary explaining the obvious and giving useless info. For example : 'I don't know if there's a higher Civilization' this sentence is repeated in almost every chapter and sometimes even more than once. A lot useless info is given in chapters and sometimes the useful part in a chapter is only worth 1 or 2 paragraphs. I know that some filler needs to be there to make the novel longer but i hope there is a balance ( like 50% is useful and 50% filler in a chapter from now's 75% filler at least in the chapters I'm reading currently). I'm saying this because sometimes its painful watching the character spending such long time on obvious decisions. That's all.

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