Review Detail of Zero_Requiem_2490 in The Game of Evolution
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The novel is great overall, but my only problem is the inconsistency in the facts presented. For instance, the occurrence of monster waves is supposed to happen every decade, with one granting a racial skill and the next a player skill. However, after the first wave, there's an 80-year time skip with only mention of the next wave, without any reference to the other seven waves that should have occurred, nor are there seven new skills in the MC panel. It's not just a typo between 'decade' and '80'; it's a significant inconsistency. Also, the civilization level in the panel shows as 0.3 when they were at the clan level, but years later, when they are tribes, the civilization level drops to 0.2. Despite these issues, the world-building and progression in the novel are excellent, and I highly recommend it. However, I urge the author (and this is for you) to create a facts and consistency notebook to refer to while writing each chapter and to edit past chapters if there are any changes made to maintain the quality of the work.
The Game of Evolution
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Don't forget how it handles the passage of time for the main character. At times, it's mentioned that '5 years is like 2 weeks for them,' but it's also stated that there isn't a time skip function after the tutorial. So 5 years is indeed 5 years, if not, then how do they monitor events and give blessings and curses to those who deserve them?
that's the time dilation, which was just for the beginning that over now the only thing that doesn't change is the candidates who will still be physically the same after the game is over. As for the review, I knew this was a problem about 40 chapters in. But I enjoyed writing, so I just went on ahead. Luckily, I can just be lazy and say that 10 years went by, and nothing happened. This is gonna be a big novel that needs a lot of cleaning up. Luckily, some of this stuff won't be around for long. Thanks for reading as well.
Oscar_Trencone:Don't forget how it handles the passage of time for the main character. At times, it's mentioned that '5 years is like 2 weeks for them,' but it's also stated that there isn't a time skip function after the tutorial. So 5 years is indeed 5 years, if not, then how do they monitor events and give blessings and curses to those who deserve them?image
Also the candidates get a skill every 100 years not decade so every 10 years a wave happens and on the 10th you get a skill so 80 years going by as said would be 8 waves and no skill by but another 2 you would get one.
MRgold1:that's the time dilation, which was just for the beginning that over now the only thing that doesn't change is the candidates who will still be physically the same after the game is over. As for the review, I knew this was a problem about 40 chapters in. But I enjoyed writing, so I just went on ahead. Luckily, I can just be lazy and say that 10 years went by, and nothing happened. This is gonna be a big novel that needs a lot of cleaning up. Luckily, some of this stuff won't be around for long. Thanks for reading as well.
Thanks for the reply. Maybe it was my mistake, but I still stand by the notebook thing and if you want to change some pre-established facts, edit past chapters for consistency.
MRgold1:Also the candidates get a skill every 100 years not decade so every 10 years a wave happens and on the 10th you get a skill so 80 years going by as said would be 8 waves and no skill by but another 2 you would get one.
P.S. Don't forget if someone has a bad comment on the story, they have to read it first, so something right you did.
MRgold1:Also the candidates get a skill every 100 years not decade so every 10 years a wave happens and on the 10th you get a skill so 80 years going by as said would be 8 waves and no skill by but another 2 you would get one.