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Eddicted
EddictedLv52yr
2023-02-24 08:41

I was expecting a realistic story after reading the 1st chapter but by 7th chapter i realized that this will be just another pipedream novel about world peace and a hero raised out of tragedy (quite appealing to ignorant masses). The deceased grand mother character made sure that the MC will be person who is happy to have people walk all over him with an assuring attitude that he wont take any revenge even when he becomes powerful in the future. I guess these kind of MC's appeal to the hidden masochistic side of whimps.

Universal Power System

KingU
4.2
379 Chs

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KingU
KingUAuthor

I am sorry that I wasn't able to meet your standards but maybe some standards just can't be met. I have given my all to this work and modelled it the way I think and like thinks. I am sorry if you hate the character design but I adore it. I hope you keep reading and maybe find that spark in the later chapters as I have indeed matured my writing as time went on, but if you don't then that alright as well. Thanks for giving my work a shot and good luck in the future.

2yr
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Eddicted
EddictedLv5

To me your novel is good in all aspects other than the MC. Some people might even like this kind of MC as Naruto and DBZ are a hit. But I simply don't like MC's with Naruto complex. If you can, please modify the first chapter a bit as it is inducing people like me to expect and yearn for a different kind of cold calculative cunning MC. Finally I wish you all the best and good luck with your novel.

2yr
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Bro listen this was one heck of an adventure for me cuz first of all I'm not interested in these kind of novels but my friend insisted and boy was shocked like what an amazing story so far, you really represented the Webnovels writers potential with your work, keep up the gud work.#UPS gang❤️

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PandaDumpling
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Very interesting first chapter. It vicidly gives the readers info about the world background as well as the power system that will be in play. Moreover, it also adds a bit of realism to this fantasy world given how humans had made certain decisions out of greed and whatnot. Overall, incredible start. Good luck, author.

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Jay_Corbitt_0777
Jay_Corbitt_0777Lv14

he lives in a technological advanced world and doesn't know how stats work........... he put his first 2 stats into perception which he didn't. eed at all at the moment and nit strength....... why? seriously why? He has been beaten to the point of near death for years and could barley finish the exercises and he was just like oh well I'll just put these 2 points Into the Stat I don't understand, even though I literally just ready a very clear straight forward description, and not into the one thing I need right now........

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Writer212
Writer212Lv11

At first, I thought this was just a copy of The bloodline system and my vampire system. But no, even though at the start they might seem similar, as the story progresses it becomes better. I just read 25 chapters and already am in love with it. Hope that you publish more chapters

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Deadly_Healer
Deadly_HealerLv13

well here is my honest opinion story isn't that bad as some people are saying but it also isn't a masterpiece it's something of you can read to pass time about MC personality he is enthusiastic yet braindead he wanna do great things but is coward. Overall society is trash if you don't have powers you are trash a lot of social status differences and a few things here and there doesn't make sense still I am writing this review after reading early chapter I think it has potential but whether or not author perform good or not who knows

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LostMz
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The writing was captivating, The characters were believable and I cared about them,The plot had so many twists and turns I couldn't put the book down and I look forward to witness a more upstanding story.

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VoIkmer
VoIkmerLv4

Well to be honest i saw a lot of potential on ur history but i don't like the type of mc that i've saw. Hi tries to be some kinda of Captain America like but this is not the type that i like. So to summarize the author either is sadic or want to run totally from any sign of a edgy mc. To be rlly honest everything i liked except the mc just not my cup of tea.

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Ziko_Abara
Ziko_AbaraLv4

The human interaction is just a bit too forced and unrealistic, the author tries to push a forgiving naruto-esque kind of MC which is calm but it’s too rushed and it interrupts the immersion. I mean i threaten to kill you and insult the one family member you ever had and you forgive me in a jiffy? Not saying the MC has to be vengeful but at least make it realistic, drag it out a bit, hint at it initially and carefully build up to it rather than lazily skip to that point all of a sudden. We’re all humans and it makes no sense cause even the best of people would find it difficult to forgive that easily. Storyline seems good and your writing isn’t bad either but the MC keeps ruining the immersion. Good luck on your story mate✌🏾

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