It’s actually not bad. You can improve on the grammar and try make each chapter longer, maybe 1k words per chapter. Any longer may be streching it.
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LIKEwell i agree with you on chapters, and grammar i believe would improve as I'm writing.., if you want you could try to read first chapter from my other fanfic about boros, and first chapter of this one/// and you will see the difference in the grammar... for chapters yes, i will try but I'm losing motivation, i need to do something about it.....
well to fight scenes , yes i will add after all next battle is 500 words... and for appearance what i can say people can just google it, but i will see
gxdz:You should also add more detail to fight scenes and maybe describe appearances since people may not know how they look like and you may not be able to provide an image.