Review Detail of JustGoDie13 in A Deathly Life

Writing this after I've completed the prologue (chapter 16). My favorite thing about this story is the consistency of the world's maturity. Sex, slavery, Stockholm syndrome, and violence are treated with a unfiltered grittiness that I personally enjoyed. The world is uncompromising and that suits the author's storytelling. Chapter 16 ends with satisfying development and I'm excited to see how the crystal affects the MC. Redemption arc here we come. The thing I enjoyed least is the punctuation and capitalization frequently used for emphasis. Especially in the first couple chapters, it's hard to ignore how frequently sentences are broken up or capitalized to convey meanings. For a lot of this, I would just recommend the author keep it simple. They write well enough that their point is already coming across without the need to make things exaggerated for the reader.