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UndeadBeing
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2023-02-21 08:06

Always the humans, can we get one novel where it isn’t ruined with a human form or acting purely like a human? Did I click on “cat” for a human? No, I clicked on cat for a cat not some Insufferable college student that happens to look like a cat. It’s always the novels with animal mc’s, they decide to clickbait their readers with a false name and act like people wanted to read about a human when they specifically looked for “animal.” The good old “was a cat so still is” bs… Qidian novels do better than the idiotic webnovel authors at animal mc’s, they actually stick with the animal rather than clickbait the readers just to do a regular novel like nothing happened.

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AKZALOTH
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Concordo demais👍

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Your characters felt hollow. Lacking in another word. You've already established the world background and even the side character story background so seamlessly that it impress me but then, the chapter about the 'Black Group' entering the lab for Jake's energy stone to 'level up' I was expecting the character development. you know? His own development,we already get the idea that he's the clown of the group, the failure in the eyes of his parents etc. etc. You've made your point. And was extremely excited that He realized that what was the point of getting the gem if they died and with the sacrifice of kitty/Kate to escape from the ants and the pressure of not being able to get out and added another pressure from the gf fainting or he shouldn't have pushed Kyle to go find his gem element to immediately rank up. I sense the character development. Also Dylan? The silent of the three could've felt the pressure especially with the mutant ants rank 4 and up digging below. And then what? Kitty awake, Kyle level up, gf awaken etc. Etc. Err author what's the point of that adventure the thrill or the sci-fi you classified this novel as? you shouldn't write you know if it's for the sake of making more money or if it's readers satisfaction, if you can't take criticism or you yourself just tooo influenced by Chinese webnovel but the thing is I've read many Chinese novels but they have one thing many people want, change. I like the characters, the concept of our mc being cat, and even Kyle who's cold cuz of trauma (typical ml) but Err 'naughty little kitty' thing? Aughr eww. and also always same attitude towards kitten except being suspicious of the cats identity by testing blood and being soften by few character development (when Kate knew Kyle massacred few people and more. )and few grammar errors otw that's fine but please, find an editor or even proofreader if this novel of yours is behind pay wall every chapter before 45 right? . And even some of your chapters felt incomplete like you literally cut them in half literally and figuratively. There's a limit on how much you can take before people leaving unsatisfied with your book I just reached from 150+ chaps but ahh meh. Ill try to read more to see your improvements on your story after you read my critique and maybe I'll read more soon. Alos don't be offended from some of my words or some of the double meaning behind them of that helps, I won't be sorry but if I'm wrong in some points I'd point out please correct me, I may or may not leave some info around to analyze more.

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