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SwordGod007
SwordGod007Lv52yr
2022-09-20 10:11

I was liking this story, but the way you wrote yakushi vs seido game really disappointed me. I mean why is miyuki making wrong calls, why is rei not using his breaking ball, and why is rei's behavior like a child who just learned baseball.

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SwordGod007
SwordGod007Lv5

I read all the chapters after Seido vs Yakushi match... but I don't appreciate the sudden behaviour change of REI...

SwordGod007
SwordGod007Lv5

I have read all the available chapters and I am shocked by some big changes in this story.... Seido players are portrayed as weak and cowardly, Kataoka is way too sentimental, Changes in timeline, and Unessecary powerup of Masamune Hongo....

SwordGod007
SwordGod007Lv5

I like chapter 68 and will give another review soon.... Rei leaving Seido will be excellent but according to japan high school baseball rules he cant participate in club activities if he changed school.....

EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

fanfic doesn't have those rules

SwordGod007:I like chapter 68 and will give another review soon.... Rei leaving Seido will be excellent but according to japan high school baseball rules he cant participate in club activities if he changed school.....
SwordGod007
SwordGod007Lv5

well that is true... but it will be exciting to see the dynamics of REI and Yakushi

EyeOfSilver:fanfic doesn't have those rules
DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

they way he left was one of the worst written twist to ever exist in fanfics, even if the move to that school was correct in theory. written terribly and forced.

SwordGod007:I like chapter 68 and will give another review soon.... Rei leaving Seido will be excellent but according to japan high school baseball rules he cant participate in club activities if he changed school.....
SwordGod007
SwordGod007Lv5

that's true... if this part could be written in great details... that would be amazing...

DetachedDreamer:they way he left was one of the worst written twist to ever exist in fanfics, even if the move to that school was correct in theory. written terribly and forced.
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