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2022-12-15 04:39

Although I give you props for keeping this fanfic steady for so long since I know how hard it is, the fanfic itself just isn’t great. Mind you, I only read through 3 chapters, so my opinion isn’t exactly great since everything could change for all I know, but the story itself is just so… cringe. I mean, Octavia is suddenly willing to die for him (when I say suddenly, I really mean it. They barely even know each other), and then a few seconds later, she walks out, leaving him. Ah, did I mention that the entire drama started because of a seat belt? Yeah, Bellamy didn’t want him to be unseatbelted(?) Like what? He would’ve gotten out sooner or later. No need to go pointing a gun at him.

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Kw0zLv14

Once again, props for having the endurance to continue writing a fanfic on a story that isn’t really great for long fanfics. You just might want to rewrite those first few cringe and unrealistic chapters if you want more readers.

MeatBunKunAuthor

Well first thing first, thanks for taking the time to read this long-as-s ff. You are right the first chapters are quite cringe and while I plan to rewrite them, that would have to wait at least until I finish the fourth season and probably the last one for this fanfiction since I see no point going into space and etc.

Kw0z:Once again, props for having the endurance to continue writing a fanfic on a story that isn’t really great for long fanfics. You just might want to rewrite those first few cringe and unrealistic chapters if you want more readers.
MelshanLv7

Harém?

MeatBunKun:Well first thing first, thanks for taking the time to read this long-as-s ff. You are right the first chapters are quite cringe and while I plan to rewrite them, that would have to wait at least until I finish the fourth season and probably the last one for this fanfiction since I see no point going into space and etc.
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