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XavierKing_6497
XavierKing_6497Lv42yr
2022-09-19 02:13

the story is good like the storyline but I would like it if you would slow down( don't make the story feel rushed) and it would be better if you are not making most of the characters immortals or if you want to make them immortals don't make everyone an immortal let it be a privilege to only people that are close to them another thing you did not account for is in his kingdom there are supposed to people that will start losing their bloodlines to marrying of people that don't have magic

In Game Of Thrones World with LOTR system

Just_for_fun1997
3.6
103 Chs

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PeerlessCat
PeerlessCatLv2

So, the author hasnt put the tags. Harem is one of them. I dont like Harem stories so i abandon this ship. But the writing quality and the updates are frequents, so if anybody likes harem is a good novel for you.

2yr

HopeBones5
HopeBones5Lv15

Grammer has some serious issues not like not knowing english, more along the lines of not knowing how to use auto correct or spell check, the words are combined and punctuation is non existsnt so that sentance structure makes it unreadable, which I dont say lightly. Plot is ok and idea itself is a great idea just poorly executed with 0 true backstory and just using the system to just insert anything the author can't plan out on their own, overall unreadable, but decent idea.

2yr
manny6440
manny6440Lv14

I like all your work so keep it up don’t dropped this book or I’ll Find you an make you Finish it[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

2yr
Fallen_Angel249
Fallen_Angel249Lv4

Theirs like a bunch of stuff wrong with this fic I cant even start to list them like the biggest problem with this fic is its grammar like it's really and I mean it really hard to follow so of the stuff dont even make sense, and my second problem about this story in how the author literally just gives the name of the character original LOTR character to the M.C when he could have been original and given him a name but that's like most authors on this sight.

2yr
Mastersun
MastersunLv1

I can't call this story more than a teenage fantasy, a harem and an easy walk of the main character through the world of Game of Thrones, that's the whole point of this story

2yr
PABELO
PABELOLv4

for me the mc SHOULD not even be there, have you ever seen a president (king) giving advice to another country (kingdom) I don't think so? or also staying in another kingdom that is not his, it is as if he is no longer native to his own land, and also because he made the mc a king but he is not doing any of that he is just a councilor from another kingdom nothing more , I here excited to see a mc king of his OWN KINGDOM, but I see a councilor from a kingdom that is not even native

2yr
JokerHighJack
JokerHighJackLv10

The idea is good but the writing is really bad. From Grammar to spelling to words that do not even make sense being there. It’s really hard to read with so many mistakes

2yr
Kimhi
KimhiLv1

good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

2yr
Gh0st00
Gh0st00Lv15

I didn't even get past chapter 2 all the errors that are on there even with the paragraph comment corrections that the author never used actually fix the chapters even after 7 months it's not worth the read cuz it's like he just threw words on a paper and didn't even try to fix anything that was wrong with them

1yr
Joseph_Hunt_7510
Joseph_Hunt_7510Lv4

the story is nice but the grammar and the spelling . seriously dude please find a editor or someone to help out with proof reading your chapters. it really ruins the mood when some lines go line . "Dragon hold sword down foot kick and her" really please get an editor

2yr
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