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lairfinLv141yr
2023-06-11 00:28

Hi, a little feedback while I’m dropping the novel after chapter 15. There are repetitive breaks of tense, and confusions in the pronouns of the MC. Those are not prohibitive but the novel might benefit from correcting these.I was coming with expectations about the genre of the novel. First chapter feels optionnal, second chapter would have made a better start right into action. Then we are immersed in the usual school life but still no sign of systems. World is built around the disappearance of demons, with angels. Suddenly they’re taught about space warriors and aliens. I believe you’ll introduce the system soon after but it’s too late for me and the mix of genres is a little bit too much for my obtuse mind. I believe mentioning just fragments of these elements in chapter 2 and 3 would have smoothen things up. Hope that feedback will help you in future works. Good luck and perseverance!

The Demon System[twice as evil].

Ebube_Uzoma
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thanks for your reasonable contribution, but if you read on from that chapter I think you'd see where it talks about system. plus it's an advanced world, far more advanced than now, so why we learn about the regular astronauts they study about the advanced space rangers, the same which MC Oliver Logan dreams of becoming. Full display of the system would soon come into play on next chapter. This first phase is actually a very important part of the book, as I'm working on a very twisted and interesting story. thanks again, and please don't stop reading, I can guarantee this book is worth the time.:-)

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The plot is intriguing and I am kind of interested in where it will lead. There are a few errors that need to be fixed however it's great. You have the potential and do continue to write more. 👌👌👌✌✌✌

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Thank you all for your remarks and comments.pls keep following up,add to library,a leave a review. I promise to be consistent in my updating. You can also leave chapter comments and paragraph comments. Stay tuned for more updates and more entertainment guys.

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Author here. Please make sure to add this book to library. enjoy your reading time

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Hi guys, I'm sorry if you noticed any error or confusion in MC's gender or age. the reason is because the book was formerly a female lead, and the initial age of MC was 10, but there's no need to be bothered, I'm currently working on making the corrections. please if you notice any further error or confusing content, do leave me a comment on the paragraph or at the end of the chapter.Thank you :-)

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hay, isn't this another interesting novel from the same inspiring author. Right from the start I knew this would be a good story. I recommend this novel for ever great reader, and I assure you that you won't regret it

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nice novel but I don't like how you make me wait for updates too long😅 I'm getting way too addicted. hope the author continues to give us more, can't wait.

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The plot is interesting and it will get you hooked and there is a lot of potential and it got me hooked I will continue waiting for upcoming chapters but there errors which really confuse me.

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