Review Detail of Pclerk in With Marvel intelligence in DC

Not many chapters yet so don’t go only off this review. There are plenty of grammar and syntax mistakes. This is annoying but the story is still understandable and readable. The updates occur decently for now. The story itself needs a lot of work. The author is just throwing stuff out there as fast as possible forcing the story to jump forward to fast. Plan key points in your storyline and add details between to make it like he is living and there is more to the world. The characters are very basic, no personalities. There are essentially no world background or environmental descriptions. Essentially it’s just has a forced and rushed feel. Slow down and plan better. Add stuff into chapters between key events. Don’t have someone say they don’t feel much about the loss of parents and then stop eating, that is an emotional response to loss so it doesn’t make sense.